Wednesday, January 20, 2010

Tormented



In the deepest hour
of night,
darkness wakes up the demons
chained within my heart and mind
from their slumber.

They wake up
to torment
and terrorize.

They chase away my sleep.
Punishing me with sleepless nights
for reasons unknown.

Every second weighs like tons,
I carry them on my shoulders.
Like a bonded labour
to unknown destination.

I tremble with fever,
fatigue and pain.
Cold and cough shake me up violently
still they show no mercy.

They watch me drag every moment
with demonic smiles.

My cheeks are wet
don’t know
whether they are tears or sweat
Both taste the same.

I eagerly wait for
the first rays of the Sun
for then
shall my torment end.

When the two demons
shall leave me free
called
Loneliness and Emptiness.

P.S. Due to lack of time am unable to write anything new. So, am publishing one of my earlier posts with a few alterations.
Hope you will enjoy it.

67 comments:

Samadrita said...

A product of a depressed state of mind I assume. :P
But I loved the way you chose your words...made for a good read,this one!
I assume you had visited my blog once..but I couldn't visit you back at the time.
Hope to read more from you! :)

Shas said...

@ Samadrita,
Welcome to my blog!!
It isn't a product of a depressed state of mind.
It is just a creative expression of a feeling or situation that everybody experiences.

Nipun said...

that was an awesome one!
so touchy touchy...:)
cool work.
very creative I must say..

Cheers

Nuts

Nipun said...

that was an awesome one!
so touchy touchy...:)
cool work.
very creative I must say..

Cheers

Nuts

paramveer said...

nice poetry...nut i hvnt enjoyed it!!...so sad to read. :(
appreciations!!:)

Shas said...

@ Nipun,
Thanks!! =)

Shas said...

@ Paramveer,
Welcome to my blog!!
Thanks but y did u feel sad. Even moments of loneliness n despair should be enjoyed.

MinnieRunner said...

Yeah, those were demons.. = loneliness - I hate it!

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awww..that was a though provoking post o have..nice one..i love it..:)

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Shas said...

@ Minnie,
Hi! welcome to my blog. =)
Yea no one likes to be lonely.

Shas said...

@ Ayu,
Hi! Thanks!!
Will check it out soon. =)

vidya said...

wow!you expressed it so well..great writing!

vidya said...

Love the look of ur blog too..

Shas said...

@ Vidya,
Thanks. Hope to see more of u here. =)

sunil said...

good one ..shas.

Shas said...

@ Sunil,
Thanks!!

Gauri Mathur said...

Poignant

Cursed♪♫ said...

Wow!
I loved your poem. gave me chills!! :)
Happens with me. You know. Feel so scared and alone at night, that I just can't sleep. That feeling's horrible!
I tremble with fever,
fatigue and pain.
Loved these lines! You write really well. Loved your blog!
Happy Blogging!!
Wink!♥♥

Shas said...

@ Gauri,
Welcome n Thanks!!
=)

Shas said...

@ Cursed,
Welcome to my blog!!
Thanks for ur comments n hope to see more of u here.

Hobo ........ ........ ........ said...

Life if incomplete is complete.
Cheers.

Sneha said...

Nicely penned down.

Nipun said...

you have been tagged!
view my blog..

sawan said...

beautifully expressed!
ters definitely something in dark which touches our heart :)

i wonder how wud it be without the two demons!! how wud it be Shas? u have no one around u, but u dnt feel lonely, u think of nothing yet dnt feel empty!! complex :( i guess ill happily take those two demons :D atleast ill value the good times :)

Thousif Raza said...

those are some lines yaar, really good... could use some depth, but that is just a critic saying ;)...

thx for the wishes on the blog, hope to see you more of u there :)


take care :)

Manish Raj said...

Came to your blog through your comment..

Shas you write very well...though like teenagers (often girls) in metro do...mystery, confusion, gloom, doom...???

Why not find a nice boyfriend (if you don't have one already), go on a date, trip together, have fun and share some of those moments...

Your writing should be like a stream of fresh water...and for that you try becoming one such stream...in your next blog...

And yes you are in my favorites list now..so I will be tracking your next posts..

The Aspirant said...

well, a nice post.......
though to some ppl dese two devils haunt evn aftr d sunrays r dere.


cheers

UL said...

greetings Shas - lovely and creative, hope you are well too...happy 2010 to you girl...

Silver said...

Beautiful, beautiful expressions from the depths of the soul..

~Silver

Shas said...

@ Hobo,
Thanks! Sorry am a bit dumb, plz elaborate ur comment.

Shas said...

@ Sneha,
Thanks n welcome to my blog!!!

Shas said...

@ Nipun,
Thanks!! Will take it up hopefully soon.

Shas said...

@ Sawan,
Thanks!!
I have experienced that moment which u asked me to imagine. Its blissful.

Yaa, true. Moments like these makes us value the good times.

Happy Blogging!!

Shas said...

@ Thousif Raza,
Welcome n thanks!!
Critics are always welcome here. :)
Hope to see u often here n ur valuable feedback.

Shas said...

@ Manish Raj,
Welcome n thanks for visiting my page.
Even without a boyfriend am happy and there are many ways of being happy and enjoying life.
Will try to bring in freshness in my writings and hope that one day it will flow like a stream.

Thanks for the suggestion n feedback.
Hope to see u here again. :)

Shas said...

@ The Aspirant,
Thanks!!
Very true.

Shas said...

@ UL,
Thanks!!
Am good. Hope u too are doing good.
Thanks for dropping by.

Shas said...

@ Silver,
Thanks!! =)

Neha said...

i am not much into poems but i like the ones which i can relate to...and i could with this piece...good thought...tc

:)

Shas said...

@ Neha,
Thanks!!

Dreaming Eyes said...

Hi.. Very very impressing.. like ur blog.. its nice.. :)

Keep blogging..

Take care.. ;)

Dreaming Eyes said...

now u have a new follower..

Together We Save said...

Wonderfully written.

NoFaIrYtAlE said...

Nyc poetry...beautiful..

Neilina said...

This is just beautiful....For me my demons could be my past or the unknown future or may be something unknown to which I can't give a word. Do you love loneliness and sometimes this emptiness?
Thanks so much for dropping-by and glad that I am here, enjoyed your blog....nice one!! keep blogging :)

Shas said...

@ Dreaming Eyes,
Welcome n thanks for being the 81st follower. =)

Sorcerer said...

nicely done..

Eggs In My Pocket / Yesteryear Embroideries said...

Hi, found your comment on my blog and thank you for stopping by. Just love your beautiful blog and your wonderful words. I am hoping that soon lonliness and emptyness will leave you to sleep in peace and happiness! blessings,Kathleen

Shas said...

@ Together we save,
Thanks!!

Shas said...

@ NoFaIrYtAlE,
Thanks!! =)

Shas said...

@ Neilina,
Thanks!!
Yaa, those demons can be anything for some it can be a guilt or an unpleasant past or ...
No one likes to be lonely including me. But there are times when such moments can be a blessing in disguise. Strange isn't it?

Shas said...

@ Sorcerer,
Welcome n thanks!!

Shas said...

@ Eggs In My Pocket / Yesteryear Embroideries,

Dear Kathleen,
Welcome n thanks!! for ur lovely comments.

Shilpa Garg said...

A very poignant expression!!

Shas said...

@ Shilpa,
Thanks!! Nice to see u here after a long time.

Tripat "Prerna" said...

When the two demons
shall leave me free
called
Loneliness and Emptiness.

wow wow wow!
3 cheers for u

Shas said...

@ Tripat "Prerna",
Welcome n thanks!!

Oxymoron said...

sleepless nights...torments of a lonley soul....nicely done...and thanks for stopping by at my blog...

Rashmi said...

Wow!
Btw i read the previous post also, i have a blog named on it Mehfil a hindi shayari blog of mine.

Nice work!
Cheers!

Makk said...

Ah!
they got you..
after me,

Lets try to njoy the saga
of the darkes night & brightest moon





Keep smiling!

Shas said...

@ Oxymoron,
Thanks!!

Shas said...

@ Rashmi,
Thankx!!
Wow! so u hav a shayari blog too. Will visit that soon.

Shas said...

@ Makk,
Oh! yes, they caught me too...lolzzz
Yea yea enjoying getting tortured n tormented.

Shalini said...

Wow! Nice read...loved the demon touch..

Shas said...

@ Shalini,
Thanks!!

Saibal Barman said...

I have just received inputs from an Anonymous blog-reader stating about someone plagiarising my post "Barman strings"...yes, it is...
And, on further scrutiny I found some other posts on that blog which includes this one of you too...Check it ( http://mkalkunte.blogspot.com/2010/02/tormented.html ) and even one of my comments on one of your posts have been used as a new post there (check comment box of your post on Memories for the link )

I have put my comments against two such posts...you may like to see those, my friend !
Regards,

Vinz said...

loved the animations..!!

nice..