Wednesday, January 20, 2010
Tormented
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She scribbles
at
9:26 PM
In the deepest hour
of night,
darkness wakes up the demons
chained within my heart and mind
from their slumber.
They wake up
to torment
and terrorize.
They chase away my sleep.
Punishing me with sleepless nights
for reasons unknown.
Every second weighs like tons,
I carry them on my shoulders.
Like a bonded labour
to unknown destination.
I tremble with fever,
fatigue and pain.
Cold and cough shake me up violently
still they show no mercy.
They watch me drag every moment
with demonic smiles.
My cheeks are wet
don’t know
whether they are tears or sweat
Both taste the same.
I eagerly wait for
the first rays of the Sun
for then
shall my torment end.
When the two demons
shall leave me free
called
Loneliness and Emptiness.
P.S. Due to lack of time am unable to write anything new. So, am publishing one of my earlier posts with a few alterations.
Hope you will enjoy it.
Labels:
loneliness,
night,
pain,
poem
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67 comments:
A product of a depressed state of mind I assume. :P
But I loved the way you chose your words...made for a good read,this one!
I assume you had visited my blog once..but I couldn't visit you back at the time.
Hope to read more from you! :)
@ Samadrita,
Welcome to my blog!!
It isn't a product of a depressed state of mind.
It is just a creative expression of a feeling or situation that everybody experiences.
that was an awesome one!
so touchy touchy...:)
cool work.
very creative I must say..
Cheers
Nuts
that was an awesome one!
so touchy touchy...:)
cool work.
very creative I must say..
Cheers
Nuts
nice poetry...nut i hvnt enjoyed it!!...so sad to read. :(
appreciations!!:)
@ Nipun,
Thanks!! =)
@ Paramveer,
Welcome to my blog!!
Thanks but y did u feel sad. Even moments of loneliness n despair should be enjoyed.
Yeah, those were demons.. = loneliness - I hate it!
awww..that was a though provoking post o have..nice one..i love it..:)
by the way, my new post:
movie review of 5 centimeetrs per second
check it out~! ^_^
@ Minnie,
Hi! welcome to my blog. =)
Yea no one likes to be lonely.
@ Ayu,
Hi! Thanks!!
Will check it out soon. =)
wow!you expressed it so well..great writing!
Love the look of ur blog too..
@ Vidya,
Thanks. Hope to see more of u here. =)
good one ..shas.
@ Sunil,
Thanks!!
Poignant
Wow!
I loved your poem. gave me chills!! :)
Happens with me. You know. Feel so scared and alone at night, that I just can't sleep. That feeling's horrible!
I tremble with fever,
fatigue and pain.
Loved these lines! You write really well. Loved your blog!
Happy Blogging!!
Wink!♥♥
@ Gauri,
Welcome n Thanks!!
=)
@ Cursed,
Welcome to my blog!!
Thanks for ur comments n hope to see more of u here.
Life if incomplete is complete.
Cheers.
Nicely penned down.
you have been tagged!
view my blog..
beautifully expressed!
ters definitely something in dark which touches our heart :)
i wonder how wud it be without the two demons!! how wud it be Shas? u have no one around u, but u dnt feel lonely, u think of nothing yet dnt feel empty!! complex :( i guess ill happily take those two demons :D atleast ill value the good times :)
those are some lines yaar, really good... could use some depth, but that is just a critic saying ;)...
thx for the wishes on the blog, hope to see you more of u there :)
take care :)
Came to your blog through your comment..
Shas you write very well...though like teenagers (often girls) in metro do...mystery, confusion, gloom, doom...???
Why not find a nice boyfriend (if you don't have one already), go on a date, trip together, have fun and share some of those moments...
Your writing should be like a stream of fresh water...and for that you try becoming one such stream...in your next blog...
And yes you are in my favorites list now..so I will be tracking your next posts..
well, a nice post.......
though to some ppl dese two devils haunt evn aftr d sunrays r dere.
cheers
greetings Shas - lovely and creative, hope you are well too...happy 2010 to you girl...
Beautiful, beautiful expressions from the depths of the soul..
~Silver
@ Hobo,
Thanks! Sorry am a bit dumb, plz elaborate ur comment.
@ Sneha,
Thanks n welcome to my blog!!!
@ Nipun,
Thanks!! Will take it up hopefully soon.
@ Sawan,
Thanks!!
I have experienced that moment which u asked me to imagine. Its blissful.
Yaa, true. Moments like these makes us value the good times.
Happy Blogging!!
@ Thousif Raza,
Welcome n thanks!!
Critics are always welcome here. :)
Hope to see u often here n ur valuable feedback.
@ Manish Raj,
Welcome n thanks for visiting my page.
Even without a boyfriend am happy and there are many ways of being happy and enjoying life.
Will try to bring in freshness in my writings and hope that one day it will flow like a stream.
Thanks for the suggestion n feedback.
Hope to see u here again. :)
@ The Aspirant,
Thanks!!
Very true.
@ UL,
Thanks!!
Am good. Hope u too are doing good.
Thanks for dropping by.
@ Silver,
Thanks!! =)
i am not much into poems but i like the ones which i can relate to...and i could with this piece...good thought...tc
:)
@ Neha,
Thanks!!
Hi.. Very very impressing.. like ur blog.. its nice.. :)
Keep blogging..
Take care.. ;)
now u have a new follower..
Wonderfully written.
Nyc poetry...beautiful..
This is just beautiful....For me my demons could be my past or the unknown future or may be something unknown to which I can't give a word. Do you love loneliness and sometimes this emptiness?
Thanks so much for dropping-by and glad that I am here, enjoyed your blog....nice one!! keep blogging :)
@ Dreaming Eyes,
Welcome n thanks for being the 81st follower. =)
nicely done..
Hi, found your comment on my blog and thank you for stopping by. Just love your beautiful blog and your wonderful words. I am hoping that soon lonliness and emptyness will leave you to sleep in peace and happiness! blessings,Kathleen
@ Together we save,
Thanks!!
@ NoFaIrYtAlE,
Thanks!! =)
@ Neilina,
Thanks!!
Yaa, those demons can be anything for some it can be a guilt or an unpleasant past or ...
No one likes to be lonely including me. But there are times when such moments can be a blessing in disguise. Strange isn't it?
@ Sorcerer,
Welcome n thanks!!
@ Eggs In My Pocket / Yesteryear Embroideries,
Dear Kathleen,
Welcome n thanks!! for ur lovely comments.
A very poignant expression!!
@ Shilpa,
Thanks!! Nice to see u here after a long time.
When the two demons
shall leave me free
called
Loneliness and Emptiness.
wow wow wow!
3 cheers for u
@ Tripat "Prerna",
Welcome n thanks!!
sleepless nights...torments of a lonley soul....nicely done...and thanks for stopping by at my blog...
Wow!
Btw i read the previous post also, i have a blog named on it Mehfil a hindi shayari blog of mine.
Nice work!
Cheers!
Ah!
they got you..
after me,
Lets try to njoy the saga
of the darkes night & brightest moon
Keep smiling!
@ Oxymoron,
Thanks!!
@ Rashmi,
Thankx!!
Wow! so u hav a shayari blog too. Will visit that soon.
@ Makk,
Oh! yes, they caught me too...lolzzz
Yea yea enjoying getting tortured n tormented.
Wow! Nice read...loved the demon touch..
@ Shalini,
Thanks!!
I have just received inputs from an Anonymous blog-reader stating about someone plagiarising my post "Barman strings"...yes, it is...
And, on further scrutiny I found some other posts on that blog which includes this one of you too...Check it ( http://mkalkunte.blogspot.com/2010/02/tormented.html ) and even one of my comments on one of your posts have been used as a new post there (check comment box of your post on Memories for the link )
I have put my comments against two such posts...you may like to see those, my friend !
Regards,
loved the animations..!!
nice..
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