Thursday, August 13, 2009

55 Fiction Time: Reported Speech

Time for 55 Fiction on my blog. Sounds like its time for chai. Equating it with a cutting chai coz it is short, refreshing and fun to read and i feel the need to have it after a regular interval. This new fiction style is spreading faster than swine flu as i can find atleast one post devoted to it on every blog.
Let me tell you a bit about 55 fiction, though you would fine the description about it on every blog (but am putting it down here more to remind myself than the readers. I have become so forgetful these days). It is a form of micro-fiction which has a maximum word limit of 55 words. I don't remember whose i had read first so am in a bit of a fix. The ones i enjoyed and which inspired me to try this genre are..... the list is long but the few (others i can't remember or find the link as i had stumbled upon them randomly) that i would like to mention are Paritosh's, Sid-O-Scope's and Mou's.
I was wondering if i was ever gonna write one. Let me admit that am the latest victim of this virus. Initially i had thought that i would not be able to pull it off but i ended up writing three. Well! don't worry i shall not torture you all in one go, it will be in small single doses. Enough of bak bak now, here's my first attempt.............

She beamed with joy as she held the medical report. It confirmed that she was pregnant.
She couldn’t wait to tell Nihal the good news and imagined how he would react on hearing. They had waited for seven long years.
Just then a nurse rushed towards her, “we’re sorry ma’m, the report had got exchanged.”

36 comments:

Paritosh said...

Damn gal!! You just broke my heart. Such a poignant story... in so less words. I know a couple who are trying to concieve for a long time now, so I cud feel each and every emotion going thru ur "she".

Too good... keep it up!!

Shas said...

Yippie! Am glad i didn't let u down this time.

HaRy!! said...

yu won on the 55 fiction note...but the story GRRRR! anyways have to remember the fact that its a fiction in the first place!..more to follow?
cya around

Shas said...

@ Harry,
Thanks! for the appreciation. The story that i have written is purely fictional.

chandreyee said...

you broke my heart...just when the hopes were soaring high you crushed it hard..think that is what fiction is all about...well done..keep them coming..:)

Shas said...

@ chandreyee,
Sorry dear for the heartbreak. Fiction can be tragic i guess....if i have got it wrong then plz enlighten me. =)

Two heartbreaks. Its getting hard to handle. :(
Next, i think, i should write a happy one.

Indian Pundit said...

Hi Shas

Felt good at first....but.......heart broken into thousand pieces.

is this your first 55 FICTION attempt????

i too tried my first 55 word fiction yesterday.

Check it out....its called "Silence".

Cheers and a great blog by the way.

Shas said...

@ Indian Pundit,
Thanks! and sorry for the heartbreak.
Ya, this is my first attempt. Will surely check out yours. Thanks for following. =)

Mr.R said...

Hi Seems like 55 F is a wildfire !
Good neat first attempt ! Do place a title too for the story or reported speech is the title ? Looking forward for more 55Fs

I tried my maiden attempt too check it out :)

Shas said...

@ Mr. R.,
Thanks! Ya, 'Reported Speech' is the title though its a bit silly one, couldn't think anything better than that.
Sure will check out urs, too.

sHiNiNg sUrYa :-) said...

really liked the 55 fiction time.
nice concept.

if possible kindly turn off the word verification thing.it makes commenting cumbersome.

Shas said...

@ Surya,
Thanks! I have removed the word verification thing. Hope it will be easy posting comments now.

sHiNiNg sUrYa :-) said...

hmmmmm

pawan said...

Hey nice one for the first attempt and I didn't guess the ending coming though!

That was painful :P

Btw,the sequel to my post is out!
Do chk it out!

Cheers!

Shas said...

@ Pawan,
Thanks for the visit n commenting. =)

Shruti said...

hey yaar!!
awesome...
felt a lump at the throat when i saw that last line!!

creativity is very good!!

BTW, i wrote 4 55Fiction!!!
check themif u like!!

u have a neat blog here :)

keep smiling!

Shas said...

@ Shruti,
Thanks! for the appreciation and welcome to my blog.

Shilpa Garg said...

A good first attempt at this form of micro fiction!!
Did'nt see it coming...the end I mean!!

Shas said...

@ Thanks! Shilpa,
Am glad i was able to hold the surprise for the end.

Mou said...

a good one !!!
i was expecting that she would suddenly find out that NIhal was something like cheating him...
But then was surprised to see the end at a different note.. innovative !!

and thanx for mentioning me ! :)

Shas said...

@ Mou,
You are always welcome! =)

Critical Satirical said...

Good attempt! But I wonder what the aim is in attempting such a short prose. More meaning in less words? But then one can't expect to drive a mercedes with 2 tyres, can we? Good attempt all the same.

Shas said...

@ Critical Satirical,
Thanks!
Thats true but at times few things do come in small packages.

Driving a merc with two tyres can be challenging n exhilarating if one can do it. =)

Sid 'Ravan' Kabe said...

heh heh heh...thats a nice attempt...and hey...i found my blog link here...:D

why are you the secret visitor on the blog?? :D

I liked the fiction-55...:D

you sud have mentioned ur name in d passing, i stumbled upon urs quite by accident now...:D

Shas said...

@ Sid,
Yeah, am your secret fan :D
Am glad you stumbled upon my blog.
Ok will show up.

subs said...

Neat.Captured the essence in 4 lines :)

Shas said...

@ Subs,
Thanks! for visiting my blog.

Sourav !!! said...

:(

55 words, precisely .. wre u counting while typing :P

Shas said...

@ Sourav,
Yes...lolzz
Coz i knew you would sit and count the words.
Y? :(

Anonymous said...

It is rather interesting for me to read this article. Thanks for it. I like such themes and anything that is connected to this matter. I definitely want to read more on that blog soon.

vivek said...

very funny

Shas said...

@ Vivek,
???...

Anonymous said...

Don't stop posting such articles. I love to read articles like this. Just add some pics :)

Shas said...

@ anonymous,
thnks! sure, will try to add pics.

Gyanban said...

Good twist and plot. Nice.

Vinz said...

Damn..Cruel...

Vinz