Here's the second lethal errr.....little dose of the promised 55 Fiction.
Title: The Promise
Title: The Promise
He felt life slipping out of his own body as he saw his son dying. He wasn’t able to get money for operation.
Seeing Tarachand at the door, he was relived.
Now, it was his turn to keep his word.
He wiped a silent tear as he asked his only daughter to leave with Tarachand.
Seeing Tarachand at the door, he was relived.
Now, it was his turn to keep his word.
He wiped a silent tear as he asked his only daughter to leave with Tarachand.
48 comments:
Hey shas!
you wrote it damn well..
but every single 55fiction you write must have a heading!
Coming to the story!
ahhh!! How can a dad be like this?! Partiality eh?! Money makes people forget morals!!
Neatly written!!
Am following you and also blog-rolling you!!
@ Shruti,
Thanks for the compliment. The title of the post is there in the heading itself. Anyways now i have put it jus above the post.
Needs and poverty at times does drive people to digress morally in order to survive.
Thanks for following and blogrolling me.
Got to know you from Shruti!
I just wrote my first 55-fiction!
I really like yours better! :P
Didn't see the end coming, good job!! :)
And the first one too...
“we’re sorry ma’m, the report had got exchanged.”
Good ones! :)
cheers ^_^
A touching and poignant 55 fiction..
Cheers!!
@ Amit,
Thank you!!! =)
oh yu all seem to hit sixes of the first ball in the 55 fiction!:) how i wish i cud do one..but end up blah blah blah!, cya around as well..
HaRy
interesting and very nicely done story dear:)
The father and the daughter... good picturisation... Liked it a lot :)
@ Harry,
This is my 2nd attempt at 55 fiction.
I love to read your blah...blah... =)
@ Shashank Shekhar,
Thanks!!! =)
ok...call me dumb...but i did not understand...:o who is tarachand??
ok ok...understand...tx shruti...
Oh my God...can't imagine it...uk...
nicely written excellently conveyed...
@ Sid,
hi hi!..
Am a bit dumbstruck.....wondering whether the comment is for me or for shruti. Have you got the answer to your question?
@ Guriya,
Welcome n Thanks! for reading both my 55s and visiting my blog.
I read your latest post. I liked it. I wanted to comment but couldn't complete the word verification as it wasn't displayed completely. Can you opt for the pop-out window comment box or remove the word verification.
nice fiction
@ s m,
Thanks!!!
@ Yellow Tulip,
Thanks!!
Hmmmm... a thought provoking story.
That's beautiful!!
@ Paritosh,
Thanks!!
@ Swatantra,
Thanks!!
Thanks for visiting my blog.
I'm quite amazed at how a lot of bloggers can convey so much in just 55 words. Seriously, I've tried very unsuccessfully!
Ok I know I had a long day today :S am not able to unknot the knot
@ Vrij,
Welcome to my blogospace. Try try till you succeed. =)
@ Lakshmi Rajan,
There is always another day to come back, pause, stare, ponder and pen your thoughts as you undo the knotted thread of thoughts in your mind.
hey shas
Check out my new 55F
'poignant' is the word..as Amit said...
and I add beautiful....the way of presentation not the incident...I hate it someone does it...
and I am sorry for the late comment..
I was a bit...busy.
Hi Shas...
Very nice blog and template u have..
This 55 fic is very nicely done. And congratulations for the awards. Your Fagged post is quite interesting..
And thanks for dropping by..otherwise i would have missed ur blog.. i will keep visiting ur place..Thank You fr the post.
Nice attempt at the now-famed 55 Fic!
Short and powerful..
@ Shruti,
Sure.
@ R S V,
Its ok u don't hav to be sorry. "Der aaye durust aaye". Am happy to know that u spared your precious time to comment on my post.
@ Being Pramoda,
Thanks for visiting my blog. Nice to see u here. I hope you keep coming back.
=)
@ Harish,
Thanks!!!
@ Harish,
Thanks!!!
Its good one
I must say ....the day met you...and now...your writing has become double edges sword..
Keep shining!!
Hey shas
Each and every word you dealt there is great and especially your way of expressing the situation is d main part i liked.looking 4 more :)
@ Makk,
Thanks!! for your compliment.
@ Vaishnav Kashi,
Thanks! for coming here. Hope am able to live up to your expectations.
=)
Hey Shas
Great one.
Cheers
@ India Pundit,
Thanks!!
Good one!
@ Rashmi
Thanks!!
i hate to think of such vulnerability, i cant imagine being in the shoes of a parent who cannot protect his/her own child...I would die first before that happens...but it is reality is it not...no wonder I hate to face reality at times...nicely put.
@ UL,
Life's like that its harsh. At times i wonder do poor people have a choice in life though we may say emphatically that everybody has a choice.
oh my....dats a lil hurtful...he shudve let his son die..grrrrr
@ Divsi,
Hmmm......difficult for a father or a parent to see his child die in front of his eyes but this doesn't mean that i support his idea of selling his daughter.
gawd! it moved me!
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