Part 1 : For those who missed out the first part.
Part 2 :
She stood there for a minute with her back against the door. Trying to control her emotions with her eyes closed. When her emotions belied her little wish, she took a deep sigh and tried to de-clutter her mind of all the thoughts, that had given her sleepless nights for the last six months. To convince herself that it would be wise to move on and take control of her life rather than wait for him to have a change of heart (probably it was too late for that to happen). But, the matters of the heart are so complicated that no amount of reasoning would allow any sense to prevail on self. Smiling at her own fate mockingly, she walked towards the mahogany desk and pulled out a set of papers from her purse. Went through the pages carefully and signed on each of them. She took a deep sigh as she had a last look at it and felt satisfied with whatever was written on it. Raathi had done a good job and he couldn't be thanked more for his caliber. She felt relieved as another set of papers were safe with him just in case....
She threw herself on the bed and tried to rest her tired body. It had been an exhausting and an eventful day as she had tried her best to wrap up things. Ah! she was supposed to call her parents, she had told them that she would call them in the evening. Quickly she reached for her phone before she could forget.
"Hello, maa."
"Hellooo, who is this?"
"Its Taashi here, maa." She said loudly.
"Oh, Taashi beta. How are you? I have been waiting for your call since afternoon."
"Haan...i was busy. Sorry, couldn't call you before. How is baba and you?"
"We are fine. Sri is also fine. Nandu has become so naughty these days. He has begun to crawl and is naughty just like Sri."
"Hmm...give my regards to Nandu, Sri and Sia. Is baba there? Wanted to speak to him."
"No, baba has gone out. Is everything alright? How is Tapan?
"Yaa, everything is fine maa. He is fine and doing good." She tried to lie her best cautiously as every parent have an uncanny way of knowing if there is anything wrong with their children..
"When will baba come back?" She asked in desperation as she longed to hear her father's voice for it was only him who understood her best.
"Don't know beta. See na, he doesn't listen to us at all. He doesn't even take care of his health. You are the only one to whom he listens. You only talk to him and make him understand."
"Acha, suno(listen). Deven's mother was saying that there is a mahrishi who is very renowned for..."
"...maa, i will talk to you later there is an urgent call coming." She quickly interrupted her mother even before her mother could complete her sentence. She was tired of her mother suggesting her to see this or that godman.
"Ok...beta." Her mother replied disappointed. "Will inform baba that you had called. Anyways, its of no use telling you anything. Bhalo theko (take care)" She hung the phone saying this in a dejected tone.
She felt bad for interrupting her mother like that and ending the call halfway. She loved her mother but couldn't take in anymore of her mahrishi remedies. She felt sad for hurting her mother. She knew that her mother had already sensed that she had pretended about the phone call.
She was having a mild headache. She tried to relax her mind but somehow she couldn't, Tapan's question kept gonging in her head. She tried not to think of anything but thoughts are like wanton wanderers they do not allow ones mind to rest. By now the mild headache had turned into a throbbing one. She turned and kept a pillow over her head but even that didn't help divert her mind from it. Well, it was a question she had to face it whether she liked it or not. She popped a crocin and switched on her ipod, allowing music to drown her thoughts....loosing herself to the words....words which echoed the tale of her life....
Saare gharonde ret ke
Lehrein aayi, lehron mein beh gayi...
(castles of sand, waves came, washed them away...)
Saare gharonde ret ke
Lehrein aayi, lehron mein beh gayi...
(castles of sand, waves came, washed them away...)
(Song "Lehrein" from the movie Aisha)
to be continued...
P.S. Thanks for the comments on my last post. Each of them meant a lot to me. Thanks to everybody once again. Hope you all enjoy the 2nd part and the song. Suggestions and feedback are welcome.
33 comments:
well, this one is indeed better than d last one.....
hmmm u r improving in story writing...nd yeah music is one thing dat cn drive u away frm evrything elz spl rock music coz dat drain ur mind of evrything...
wi8ing fr next part.....
cheers :)
@ The Aspirant,
Thanks for your comment a lot.
Now i can take a sigh of relief, i was very apprehensive about this post. The fact that atleast one person liked it, makes me feel happy though am yet to learn about other's opinion.
@shas
dun't wrrry others vl lyk it too......nd things get better only wen u keep trying on it nd dats d way lyf moves too....
so keep writing....
cheers :)
@ The aspirant,
Thanks buddy, for your sweet words. :)
there you go much better .. I loved it and cant wait for the next part to come .. now make sure not to make us wait for long :)
Then i can read all of it again all the parts and enjoy the whole story .. :)
well done shas :)
@ Bikramjit,
Thankyou soooo much. Sorry for making you wait. Will try my best not to make everybody wait for so long for the next one.
You plan to read it all over again, wow it will be a huge compliment for me. I hope i don't disappoint you in the next one and hope you don't change your mind :)
guess yu got me going matey... like Bikram says.. cant wait :)! bring yur knack soon
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OMG! The lovely song made me reminiscence on my several visits to India. Love the food as vegetarian food was and is available everywhere.
Will look forward to the second part of your short story. :)
Excellent effort, Shas. The mahogany desk set me thngking. I have only read of them in books, yet to see one.
Keep it up n all th best........looking forward to Pt 3.
an interesting tale...the wanton wandering thoughts gave a good image...something i can relate to...excellent choice of lyric to end on as well...nice story...
Wow... Nicely written..
And the music.. It goes along with the story very well.. I was like visualizing the whole scene..
Keep writing.. :)
Vivek.
Wow... Nicely written..
And the music.. It goes along with the story very well.. I was like visualizing the whole scene..
Keep writing.. :)
Vivek.
waiting for the next. :)
@ Hary,
Thanks! Pal, am getting nervous now. I hope my next one does not become a dud.
@ The Chair Speaks,
Welcome to my page n thanks for dropping by. Am glad that you liked the song. I liked the mood and the lyrics of the song so much that i planned to make it a part of the story.
@ Cool4u,
Welcome friend to my blog n thanks! I dream of getting a giant customized one someday :)
@ Brian Miller,
Thanks! am glad you liked the story :)
@ Vivek,
Mission Accomplished :) :) :)
To be more precise, that was the aim of letting the song play in the background and give the readers a feel of the mood and the situation.
Thanks! for dropping in here.
@ Anonymous someone,
Thanks! Will try to come up soon with the next part :)
Part1 & Part2 Are Fantastic. Very Well Written.
@ Creativity,
Thanks a ton!!
readin this made me read the first part as well...jus goes to show how much i loved this
thou fiction is not my genre but the way u have shaped this is awesome!
@ Mayz,
Thank you so much for reading it =)
absolutely loved it...waiting for the next part.
@ Ria,
Thanks!!
Hey!
Thanks for the support...there is a writers meet at CP today...come along if you are interested...I along with a lot of other writers are going to be around...Nigerian author, Onyeka Nwelue (of The Abyssinian Boy fame) fame is going to be there as well. The address is Cafe Coffee Day, Outer Circle, at 5:30. Hope to see you there! :)
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A heartbreaking story, Shas. You
write with sincere emotion.
nice post,, want to read the next part!!
n thanks for stopping by my blog
@ Scribblers Inc,
Welcome! Thanks for the info. Will get in touch with you soon :)
@ Cynthia,
Welcome to my space n thanks for your comments :)
@ moonlite:D,
Welcome! Thanks for expressing your enthusiasm, it works like a boost for me :)
Will try to finish the 3rd part soon.
Hey shas, I read both the parts that was a touching story, waiting for the next one. Hey btw I am not an experienced writer I am just a baby, yet I feel the word "she" was repeated a lot of times which might get disturbing at times. Honestly the plot is good which can keep the reader glued. Thanks for visiting my blog.
@ Palak Vasant,
Thanks! for your honest feedback. Yes, even i realised that 'she' has been repeated quite a number of times. Since, it was written in one go so I couldn't change much of the things though I wanted to avoid the repetitions. Will try to remember that next time and improve my writing. I am not a writer, just trying my shot at story-telling so plz excuse the shortcomings.
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