How deftly
and
With surgical precision
You use
Your words to
Shear not just the heart
But mind and body,
All together.
Shredding them
to unrecognizable entities,
You watch
With Pleasure,
The Other
wreathe in confusion and pain.
As you make
Your cold moves
With sadistic overtures.....
P.S. Thanks to Compassion Unlimited for suggesting the word "Ripper" for the title.
60 comments:
I am bad with titles myself but the poem is really intense and I love it! :-)
The Ripper Of A Different Kind !
TC
CU
Wrath? :P :P
LOVE:- the after effects...
it happens what you wrote and much worse when you know it was all a PLAN..
@ Raaji,
Thanks!!
@ Compassion Unlimited,
Thanks! An interesting take :)
@ Kish,
Hi! Nice to see u.
Thanks!
Hmm...too strong :)
@ Bikramjit,
Thanks!
Ya, right if its a planned, cold-blooded one then it can be devastating.
what about the title
"OGRE" if your referring a male
&
"OGRESS" for female ...
I presume you would choose "OGRE" :)
btw this topic is overshadowing ur poem ,it was very well written :)
keep em comin
cheers !!!
could feel the pain through those words..and the pic adds to the intensity....
I hope you are fine..take care
hmmm i guess soul ripper is good :D
Ooph..
The lady in the picture has got thick hair!! :P
Vivek.
I'd call it "The Pain" but then I think your's is more apt.
:)
@ Sathish,
Thanks for the title suggestion n ur comments on the distraction part.
Have immediately removed the P>S> thing. Surely, I don't want to divert the attention from the poem.
@ Unknown,
Thanks! for your concern n comments. Am perfectly fine and everything is alright at my end :)
@ Chocolate Lover,
Thanks!!
@ Vivek,
:D :D
@ Blasphemous Aesthete,
Thanks for the suggestion :)
ahaa
look at the transformation... from bliss to bloody...
ehem...
@ Deeps,
Hmm....nice one :)
Thanks!!
It took me 5 mins to type this comment and still i dont know how to appreciate ur poem... superb :)
@ Sid,
Thanks buds :)
Emotions are very well expressed and intense.
It's nicely written and I like if it's a fiction!
Aah what depiction of pain!!
Shas, i knew a person like the one
in your poem once...that tiny
tinge of masochisitic edge is
very dangerous because the sadistic
types feed off it-
i learned to show no emotion in my
face or voice, it throws these
people off and confuses them.
hugs,
toi
very well written..good job!
oh!
That was painful!
Shas I have taken the award it honours my blog now.. and you been awarded tooo :)
is my " butterfly friend "all right....???
@ Chandrika Shubham,
Thanks!!
@ Sourav,
Thanks! Will try fiction next time :)
@ Ria,
Thanks!!
@ Toi,
Thanks for sharing your exp.!
@ Harman,
Thanks!
@ Pooja,
Thanks!
@ Bikramjit,
Thanks for the award. Will check it out soon :)
@ Ashu,
Thanks buddy for asking, am doing good :)
Its nice, can't think of words to describe it :)
Its painful..hurting..
very intense and cutting ! I hope it's not inspired out of a real life incident. But Love - it can even turn into a monster !
wow. vivid picture that captures the essence of the poem well...words do have that power...
That was so intense!
:(
But, loved it even though it was dark
OMG! this one is so good! and the picture is also disturbing..poor girl :/
Sad one.. but enjoyed the way you have written it Sh@s :)
@ Kelvin,
Thanks!
@ Tomz,
Thanks!
@ Purpleheart,
Thanks! Love has the potential to make n break, both.
@ Brian Miller,
Thanks!
@ Akansha,
Thanks for your appreciation :)
@ Ayu,
Thanks!
@ Kanagu,
Thanks!
painful.
@ Restless mind,
Hmm...thanks for dropping in :)
pain is always under rated.....but you do know how to highlight its effects for sure.....lovely poem!
@ Hera K,
welcome to my blog n Thanks!!
well written, could seriously feel dose cold moves, ripping apart..cheers... :)
Namit,
My SPACE- Wen i was a boy
will you tell me what was the P.S.??
@ Namit,
Welcome n thanks for your comment :)
@ Makk,
I was not able to think of a title for this post so i had asked for suggestions.
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